Drunken Memories

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    Written in response to UPA Forum Post: Traffic
    6/16/2009

    May this poem bring soberness to someone's life...
    Marcus

    Drunken Memories

     With screeching, screaming tires,
    Billowing smoke; blaring horn,
    Thunderous crash, flesh a'ripping;
    As on angel's wings I'm borne

    Back through flashing memories
    To the birth of my first child;
    So much joy my soul to relish,
    Such perfection, heart beguiled

    On to school on first day crying;
    Broken heart, I stood alone...
    Watching babe I ere have cradled
    Walking, smiling, going... gone

    Now, 'tis night of graduation,
    Standing tall in cap and gown;
    Soon my side he will be leaving...
    So in drink my sorrows drown.

    I see the Kodak's of time and season
    Flash before my tumbling eyes
    And as my car is torn to pieces
    On wings of death, I realize...

     Selfish thoughts now have taken
    Drunken father from loving son,
    And the Kodak's of his tomorrow
    Will forever be... minus one.


    Marcus Lewis
    6/16/2009

    Written in response to UPA Challenge: Traffic
    Posted on public forum.

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    frog commented on Drunken Memories

    08-02-2009

    'Minus one'...Such a powerful portrayal of realization. This poem had an effect on me as if I was hit by a brick. You did a wonderful job with this write.
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    JCKasper commented on Drunken Memories

    07-31-2009

    Albeit sobering (Pun Intended) , It really strikes at the heart in today's society of a very serious problem --------- This is well written and something that most people (Including Myself) can relate to ........ I have a son who just turned 16 and has his driver's permit ! Great Job !!!
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    UnworthyFather

    08/01/2009

    Thank you very much, JCKasper. I really hope this poem hits a spot with people. Thank you again. Marcus

    1blackbarbie commented on Drunken Memories

    07-30-2009

    YES!!! I agree with everyone else. it was very well written. You are a very good poet. Hopefully as time goes by, I too can be as good as you.
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    UnworthyFather

    08/01/2009

    Thank you very much, Ma'am, for kindness and support. I am sure that you are much better than I am. Marcus

    badgerbutterfly commented on Drunken Memories

    07-29-2009

    Hello Unworthy Father.... I love this poem as it was hard to read...having lost two people I love from a drunk driver.. Very well versed.. I rate it an honest 10.. Keep up the writing...Good Work!!...
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    UnworthyFather

    08/01/2009

    Thank you so much, Ma'am. I am deeply sorry for your loss. Marcus

    Rocetman commented on Drunken Memories

    07-28-2009

    Put to words in perfect form, I give a lot of nine's to the talent that I read . but you my friend are getting a lot of ten's!! I'll be reading alot more of your work,, thank's..
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    UnworthyFather

    07/28/2009

    Thank you very much, Sir, for your support,and kindness. Marcus

    Poetry is finer and more philosophical than history; for poetry expresses the universal, and history only the particular.

    Aristotle (384 BC-322 BC) Greek philosopher.

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