Hannah's Song

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  • Angst

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    Don't ask. I wrote this for my 15 year old sister so it is a big deviation from what I am used to writing.

    Hannah's Song

     Once upon an agelong past
    The heart she gave away too fast
    Was returned to the water from whence it came
    And there it lies in silent shame


    On the tides and swells
    That carry love along
    and echoed in the seashells
    may you hear her tearful song

    She sings about love lost
    That she wasn't strong enough to keep
    Lamenting the dreadful cost
    From beneath the ocean deep

    And any dareful lover
    Who ventures too far out
    Is certain to discover
    Just what her sorrow is about

    So be careful with your heart dear
    gaurd it tight until you are strong
    But hold on to sense, not fear
    And remember Hannah's song

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    blvdobd2009 commented on Hannah's Song

    09-28-2010

    ive always loved that when a true artist writes out of their own personal discovery versus skill they expel their soul n a way that a reader will feel what the author feels. Love lost is all too relatable and you have mastered capturing what that torment feels like n words. "and any dareful lover who ventures too far out is certain to discover just what her sorrow is all about" simply masterful
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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