the not so immaculate

8 Comments

Tags:
  • PoemBuilder

    Poem Commentary

    Built with Poem Builder! by me, ry, and papa it's awesome u guys check it out

    the not so immaculate

     on the eve of mans dawn
    angels flittered about with calm
    sensing change that was needed
    warnings flared but never heeded
    will their be joy in their life
    or will it be filled with strife
    as i see the angels flight
    wings spread afar under the moon's light
    as the shadows grow across the land
    witnessing the dawn of man
    the angel's hope begins to bloom
    shedding light through out the gloom
    and then with thunderous roar
    mans destiny sealed forever more
    immaculate, not so it seems
    exceeding man's wildest dreams
    spirits soar in the hours to come
    and never shall this be undone
    to live their shame for eternity
    to play their game for all to see

    Poem Comments

    (8)

    Please login or register

    You must be logged in or register a new account in order to
    leave comments/feedback and rate this poem.

    Login or Register

    lastyl commented on the not so immaculate

    07-16-2010

    once again, brilliant, i love reading your work!! I look forward to reading more.
    Reply to Comment

    gregster commented on the not so immaculate

    05-11-2010

    you are indeed a great poem i lie your work........awesome
    Reply to Comment

    SuSpence commented on the not so immaculate

    04-27-2010

    It turned out awesome! I love that poetry writer concept. -Spence
    Reply to Comment

    Dano commented on the not so immaculate

    04-22-2010

    a great poem from start to finish... nicely written
    Reply to Comment

    Artie commented on the not so immaculate

    04-22-2010

    I really like this piece!! The story is so compelling - I want more - 10 from me
    Reply to Comment

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

    ladynight’s Poems (19)

    Title Comments Submitted
    Title Comments Submitted
    Too Late 7 08/26/2010
    Ode to my Homie 3 08/11/2010
    Love Lost 12 07/13/2010
    Thoughts of the Past 11 05/19/2010
    Behind the Facade 9 04/28/2010
    the not so immaculate 8 02/12/2010
    Why 9 02/11/2010
    What's Hidden Within 6 02/08/2010
    The Cutter 15 02/01/2010
    You and Me 9 01/25/2010
    Letting Go 12 01/05/2010
    Alone 15 07/13/2009
    The Depression of Youth 18 06/19/2009
    Promises 6 05/28/2009
    Good-bye 5 05/27/2009
    Ending It All 12 05/27/2009
    Darkness 9 05/26/2009
    What I Thought You Were 6 05/26/2009
    The Fire 22 05/26/2009
    Top of Page