Untitled - December 14, 2009

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    I was listening to "Asu Wa Kuru Kara" by DBSK when I thought of this. It kinda follows the beat to the song on some parts. By the way DBSK is a Korean group. =)

    Untitled - December 14, 2009

    I don't know why, I don't know why, I must feel this way

    All I know is that I can't help the way you make me feel

    I just wish that you knew that all I want is with you, cause my heart can't take this pain anymore

    It seems that all we ever do is fight, just once I wish that we could laugh, at all the silly things that seem to happen when you are with me

    I just wish, I just wish, that you could be with me, that way we could always be so happy under the moon

    It all seems like just a dream that we can't shake off, whenever you seem to smile at me so sadly

    I just wish that all my dreams could come to be true, that way we could smile so happily,

    But it seems that my dreams will be just random dreams, because we can't seem to laugh with a smile.

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    urlover91 commented on Untitled - December 14, 2009

    01-04-2010

    it was nice. i saw something in it but i'll tell ya later. you got a gift but you have to build on it!!!! duh :)
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    redbloodink commented on Untitled - December 14, 2009

    12-15-2009

    Wow Loves........ nice write.... I think that happiness don't come from another it comes from within yourself.... I also believe and know you can not make another Happy they have to be happy the same way.... then you both can share the happiness you have found in each other...... I found this happiness in God yes our Lord Jesus Christ, may He come upon you and bless you...... Red
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    Rygar commented on Untitled - December 14, 2009

    12-15-2009

    good write hun, i enjoyed reading it, you have talent in your little pen there :)
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    mistynites26 commented on Untitled - December 14, 2009

    12-14-2009

    Very touching loves...I remember too well how this feeling goes....Wonderful write
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    WindsOfMemory commented on Untitled - December 14, 2009

    12-14-2009

    wow nonners dont u realize that this may be one of the best songs anyone has ever written and should be spoken of as such. :D way to go baby. ur good hun.
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