I Offer These Gifts

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  • Pain

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    Written for a friend who's girlfriend left him for some guy she had just met.

    I Offer These Gifts

    I stand before you,
    bleeding and dying.
    I stand here to offer my heart,
    which I carved out of my chest.
    I offer you each lung for every lie I ever told.
    I sway side to side as I offer you my organs one by one.
    It is what you deserve after all the pain I put you through.
    Now I stand before you,
    a hallow corpse,
    filled with nothing but pain and sorrow.
    It is time now for my last gift to you.
    I offer you the blood that flows from my wounds.
    “I hope you make it last” I say as I leave the gift that you would have cherished alive.
    I leave you with my mutilated corpse and a head full of nightmarish memories.

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    urlover91 commented on I Offer These Gifts

    01-04-2010

    buttercup!!!! lol jk jk please dont beat me up!!! its good. ok, i'll admit and dont brag. rating down! lol jk
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    wamomo commented on I Offer These Gifts

    12-19-2009

    ...very deep, dark & profound write.. full of emotion....you are a very deep thinker!!...can't wait to read more!...great job!
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    SuperChick76 commented on I Offer These Gifts

    12-19-2009

    The last line is a little off flow, but the rest of it was very nicely written. It's describing such guilt and the offering of ones life. Brilliantly written.
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    sammia commented on I Offer These Gifts

    12-19-2009

    WOW is all i can say. my favorite line in this is " I stand before you, bleeding and dying." wonderfful write
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    blanket commented on I Offer These Gifts

    12-19-2009

    fantastically morbid and oh so dark.....very very good doll.....loved it.
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