Sweet Anticpation

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    Sweet Anticpation
    Simply, softly, gently my hands upon your hips
    Face to face, a breath away from touching lip to lips
    The air is charged with lust, and uneasy anticipation
    Mind swimming delicously, thinking of the destination
    Im lost in your eyes not wanting to be found
    I would not notice if the world burned to the ground
    Our lips come together so lightly, as we taste each others life
    The tension between us thickens, to cut it would take a knife
    The taste and smell intoxicating, taking only tiny sips
    Excitement increases causing the tightening of my grip
    Holding firmly to your hips I kiss you sweetly on your neck
    Feeling your body quiver is making me a nervous wreck
    You love the way I make you feel, you like it so much
    You like the way I kiss you, you love the way I touch
    We are both in a state of excitement, and ready to do so much more
    This is where I say goodbye to the reader, it is time to close the door

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    stellar commented on Sweet Anticpation

    10-19-2009

    rhyming is very good the wit too is exceptional...love the erotism...just love it so much
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    acesgood commented on Sweet Anticpation

    10-05-2009

    I would just like ot say that you are very creative and i can see where your passion was going not everyone can feel that way but if you have truly experienced that kind of passion there are really no words to describe ow it make you feel i loved this poem and hope you continue to write so passionately creative!!!!
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    CCsMom commented on Sweet Anticpation

    06-04-2009

    Just because it rhymes, doesnt mean you've used the RIGHT rhyme. Or that you've chosen a word with enough passion and description to really give a reader the mental image you're trying to convey. Buy a thesaurus and get creative!
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    Johnny

    06/09/2009

    Thank you for reading my work. I welcome all comments, I mean honestly, it is probably not possible to please everyone with every poem. I certainly see what you are saying, but for me, I write from the heart, and almost everything is from my life experience, when I sit down to write its from an inspiration that has hit me out of the blue, and I chose to let it just come out that way. If I were to sit using a thesaurus, it would not only not be me from the heart, it would interupt the flow of how I write what comes to me. Thank you again for reading, and I do apoligize if I left you feeling like my work was not creative or passionate enough.

    AshRenee commented on Sweet Anticpation

    06-03-2009

    Clever. I liked it. It has such good detail. I love the feeling that comes out of it. It's a beautiful piece and I hope that you continue
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    Johnny

    06/09/2009

    Glad you liked it, thank you so much for reading and commenting on my work !

    jceclipse commented on Sweet Anticpation

    06-01-2009

    I'm going to be truthful and give constructive criticism if needed. It does rhyme well but that's a bit irrelevant in most poetry. I really like how it's very passionate but it lacks a little sophistication and mystery. Leave the imagination more to the reader instead of getting straught to the point. The ending is clever. Good job.
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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