"Night of the Snow Moth"

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Well, here's my latest completed poem. It involves a fable, one I discovered upon a spot of research after its completion, weird. It's very loosely based on a childhood experience in the NE. It was originally going to be six verses, but it needed a seventh to smooth an awkward transition area. I hope everyone truly enjoys this - it was an absolute blast to write!

"Night of the Snow Moth"



On a dormant winter eve far ago
Early winter, after a snowstorm blew
As the lands slept in their icy white glow
I felt displaced, should've been sleeping too.

Awake, and no one else, nor the season
And so vast and radiant was the night
And with that, I needed no more reason
Out I went into the snowbound moonlight.


The air, the chill night air of the unknown
I smelled a fence in its indigo sleeve
I breathed in the pines, hemlocks, all alone
I felt more than I ever dreamt that eve.

Just a tranquil night midst the frozen seas
The watching moon, a shooting star surpassed
The stately state of the icebreaker trees
The only proof the winters ever passed.


Deeper into the flourescent forest
As I battled back a forbidden sense
Some ways further, well far enough I guessed
Almost lost in the drifts and monuments.

A blue rose nodded far off in the snow
There in the white sky that blue cloud fluttered
There it fluttered and declared itself aglow
I laughed, we laughed, and we never wilted.

As the winds went blustering by that eve
Again I could not stay, only God knew
As I wandered back, forgetting the leave
And then I remembered, the snows dream too.



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stellar commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

10-19-2009

Reading this one makes me want to switch that view of this moth to mine just for a moment just to enjoy what he sees...You always perfectly captured the atmosphere...Love this one so much

angel3337 commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

09-11-2009

Inspiring, captivating the mind and the soul, painting a beautiful enchanted night.~

Stardrift

09/13/2009

Thanks Angel! I took a cue or two from Frost on that one.

Hampton commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

09-09-2009

I like this pem very much. Your words softly capture the moment and draw the reader into the forest.

Stardrift

09/09/2009

Thankyou, Hamps! And I commented on your recent moth write - pensive btw! Ty again.

danmartyjake1 commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

09-01-2009

Words that caress with so much feeling and genuineness. Truly a pleasure to read you.

Stardrift

09/02/2009

Ty again! That one started out as a complete mess - I'm surprised it came out quite so good. Ty very much, Danmar (?)! I really don't wanna write that whole name out, lol!!

WinterFrost commented on "Night of the Snow Moth"

08-17-2009

Very nice poem. Love the visuals yours, Winter

Stardrift

08/17/2009

Hey, thanks, WF! Visuals are very important to me, I probably should've been a painter, or maybe I was one! Ty.

When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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