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  • Sadness

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    I don't know if i should keep goin gor if this is an ok end????/ fill me with ur comments please....lol

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     Hurt inside
    a hole burns
    its way through heart and mind
    this is just another sign

    a sign that its over
    that I've officially
    lost my mind
    this is practically
    the last sunrise

    eyes burn
    as tears stream
    down your face
    you're greif stricken
    and you just cant escape

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    redbloodink commented on (no name yet)

    04-12-2010

    No need to hold on to that hurt....... I agree with Clift..... your futrue is ahead of you.... great creativity......... you were born to create..... red
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    tsmith

    04/12/2010

    aww thanks girl.....i really appreciae it

    redbloodink

    04/12/2010

    np yw........

    cliftondurant commented on (no name yet)

    10-14-2009

    keep fighting tsmith your future is in front of you and you don't know what tomorrow will bring good job
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    TheAngelOfDeath commented on (no name yet)

    09-30-2009

    Ahhh i see you have gotin alot better sence the last time i read your work.. This poem speaks for its self. the only thing i would improve is the Grammer and Form ( way the words were typed) Nice 10 from me.
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    teasasue commented on (no name yet)

    09-04-2009

    I think its good just the way it is, and I would not change anything, No I dont know what you are going thorugh but I can relate to the feeling of losing my mind, good job
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    tsmith

    09/09/2009

    thnx

    photochick commented on (no name yet)

    09-04-2009

    I think the ending really fits actually I would leave it how it is there is a nice flow and rhythm here dark pain stricken and sadness are all within this lines you painted a great picture of the pain and torture your going through and many can relate to these emotions you have a very emotionally powerful poem here I give you a 10 nice write keep up the work looking forward to reading more
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