Falling to pieces

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    Falling to pieces

     Falling to pieces
    your left broken and scarred
    she walked away
    you lie limp in a car

    I'm still here faithfully
    but I'm also surprised
    to see the beaten figure
    the pain in your eyes

    my heart goes out to you
    each and everyday
    I wake up beside you
    and silently pray

    Pray for your health
    pray your heart mends
    but I already know
    you'll never be whole again

    Even now, looking back on the past
    my heartbeat still quickens
    my eyes still fill with tears
    still not sure it was best
    that you stayed here

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    Musicmynded1 commented on Falling to pieces

    08-25-2010

    Back and forth i sway with the wind, resolution slips away again. Right through my fingers and into my heart, where its outta reach and its in the dark.... somtimes i think im blind, or maybe im paralyzed..... (google it)
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    dahlusion commented on Falling to pieces

    07-20-2010

    "I'm still here faithfully but I'm also surprised to see the beaten figure the pain in your eyes"—this is so beautiful! Bravo!!
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    Crush commented on Falling to pieces

    06-24-2010

    "...still not sure it was best that you stayed here". i love that line and it makes the poem kick with honesty. unpopular is this compasssion. well done and quite brave. 8
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    tsmith

    06/25/2010

    Thanks i tend to b a very out spoken person lol

    trucker1 commented on Falling to pieces

    05-07-2010

    This is a beautiful poem. The feeling is there. The love a caring also shows.
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    SuperChick76 commented on Falling to pieces

    03-10-2010

    A very deep, fairly sad poem. Beautifully written though. Your care was expressed brilliantly. Good job.
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    tsmith

    03/11/2010

    thanks

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