In a Flash

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    Here is a quote by a teen that had an abortion: Although I still have the ultrasound it still brings back memories that hurt me. Remember that you have the power to say no because you are the one that will have to make the appointment…not your mother, not your father, you. Just remember that and plan ahead for your child’s future because being a mommy is a huge responsibility. The abortion even affected my mom although she didn’t want me to have him. I know she would have helped me now. So in the end abortion is not right. So R.I.P. to My Baby…Mommy loves you……….

    In a Flash

    A walking zombie
    All but dead inside
    Heard a heart beating
    Her caring had died

     

    As read in a book
    Same words from a snake
    She bought all his lies
    Backspaced a mistake

     

    People playing God
    Heart stopped in a flash
    Small one of no choice
    Thrown out with the trash

     

    Does anybody care?
    Does anyone know?
    A life in a womb
    Made a final plateau

     

    A world lost to flesh
    Was stuck in a rut
    Bought for a small price
    Consumed by the smut

     

    Regrets and the hurt
    She would if she could
    Be Mommy to him
    Love all that she should

     

    She found the good news
    God came to forgive
    She tells us her story
    Her reason to live

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    ApaqRasgirl commented on In a Flash

    08-07-2010

    wow, my friend, this one made me cry, I'm glad I never had to go through that, very heartfelt piece dear....I loved the rhythm and flow went very smooth.....thanks for the read. loves ya asha
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    SavVySam commented on In a Flash

    08-02-2010

    Maddi~Hope you don't mind if I say kudos and ME TOO! Brave offering on a timely and sensitive subject...powerful write!
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    Madelynn commented on In a Flash

    07-14-2010

    Tons of emotions going on here- for the reader. I won't voice my opinion on abortion (for/ or against) I will voice that I love all children, even the ones who arent born yet- and all mothers, both young and old, wheather they choose to deliver/ or not.. I won't judge. What I will judge is this poem- powerful, political, and religious topic you have chosen!- You have nailed each line with a perfection geared to provoke your reader into thought. Well written, and strong voice!-10, Maddi
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    Oblaidon

    07/14/2010

    Maddi, I guess you don't have to be for or against to know that some women may regret the decision they have made. Thanks for your comment. -Al

    ccslim commented on In a Flash

    06-10-2010

    Really dig this through it's message and rhythm! Nice Touch Brother!
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    LeslieMay commented on In a Flash

    06-09-2010

    This is heartwrenching, but very powerful. All life deserves a chance....I became pregnant at 14. I was urged to get an abortion, but instead I chose adoption. Now I know he has a beautiful life, full of oppurtunity, that I was able to give him. You captured the emotion of your story perfectly.
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    Oblaidon

    07/14/2010

    May God bless you LeslieMay. Thank you for your comment. :)

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