Faint

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    I have a big problem that time so that night I go to church for asking some help. I stay afterwards in the plaza outside the church and glance above. There I see a very faint star that inspire me to write this one. The star might be an omen from God because tomorrow after that night my problem was solved...^_^ v

    Faint

     Amidst the smog
    That wraps your city
    Clogging the view
    above the horizon
    Of skies beauty
    There is still one star left
    that you see
    And in your heart's ear
    it whisper:
    Amidst the intense smoke
    that hids the multitude
    Of other
    hope and light giving company
    I'm still here
    to light and guide you
    On your way
    Yet I may be so faint
    But the vision of your soul sees
    that this faint light
    is enough
    To lit extinguished hope
    to blaze again
    in your cold heart!

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    dahlusion commented on Faint

    01-21-2010

    Cosmic, divine, beautifully penned in your poetic language
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    cmlestrade commented on Faint

    01-08-2010

    Very nice write that left me surprised at the end. I thought I had a love poem but it turned bittersweet. i could not quite connect the title to the poem yet I was intriqued all the same. very good effort.
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    Rhymer commented on Faint

    12-17-2009

    I enjoyed this write, and was reading your comments regarding editing your work. A person can over edit, but this is not as bad as a person who does not edit or proof read their work. Well written piece 10 from me.
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    StandingBear commented on Faint

    12-16-2009

    An interesting, philosophical work derived from a tiny light of a single star. Great inspirational write!
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    Oblaidon commented on Faint

    11-20-2009

    You had me until the last line. Thanks for the write. :)
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    stellar

    11/22/2009

    thanks for the comment

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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