Edge of Forever

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    This is the beginning of what I hope might some day be a collaboration with Drifter.

    Edge of Forever
    Standing on the edge of forever
    Jasmine knew her life would never be the same
    It wasn't actually life
    she was hoping for though
    It was death, immortal life
    If she took Meridian's hand death would follow
    if she didn't Jasmine would grow old without her
    Eternal life? Or life without love?
    Was there any real choice?
    She placed her shaky hand
    in Meridian's deathly cold one
    and took her last fleeting breath
    as Meridian's fangs pierced the
    tender pulse that would never beat again

    ~vrj
    2009

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    sevyn7 commented on Edge of Forever

    02-02-2012

    Wow, this was a great write, you hooked me at the title, and had me in awe at the end.
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    kdarcy commented on Edge of Forever

    01-08-2011

    Doesn't each day sometimes stand on the edge? A nice write, I will check your others offerings out, be well k
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    ApaqRasgirl commented on Edge of Forever

    08-25-2010

    wow, that was powerful.......a love like that would have to be the one and only one, to take that step........great read........love asha
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    latinangel

    08/26/2010

    Thank you asha that is very kind of you

    WordSlinger commented on Edge of Forever

    08-25-2010

    Wanting to graduate from never learning must be hard choice, felt it, been there, delt it, since where, here, reading on the edge of forever, ty WS
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    Beth1703 commented on Edge of Forever

    08-25-2010

    i like this poem and your obviously very talented but i think the vampire thing has been overdone but i like the fact that jasmine realised she couldn't live with out love because thats the truth no one can survive if their hearts are not open to love every one must love or they do not truly live.
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    latinangel

    08/25/2010

    I agree Beth the vampire thing has been overdone but I also agree that Jasmine's is more of a love story. A true love story and that is still very much a human thing.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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