Bottles of Lemonade

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    Bottles of Lemonade

     There once was a bottle of water
    That wanted to be more like his friend
    Jealousy overtook him,
    and he started to search for powder.
    Now on the day of the first full moon of spring
    came along a man dressed in paper
    With a knife, the bottle of water cut him open from his backside,
    and stole his powdered soul.
    For all of the rest of his days, he would live as lemonade.

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    tenderpoison commented on Bottles of Lemonade

    01-12-2011

    and here I thought it was if life gave you lemons....lol. you're a nut, but a fun one.
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    papapaczki

    01/12/2011

    Thanks for seeing the humor in this! Thanks for the read.

    frankson03 commented on Bottles of Lemonade

    12-14-2010

    wholed up,, cuz that joint was short and sweet, i def get it, he lived the rest of his life bitter,, i rock with this one,, big ups...
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    gogant commented on Bottles of Lemonade

    11-02-2010

    Well, it ain't the best way to create lemonade, but it's original....
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    soulwriter commented on Bottles of Lemonade

    10-13-2010

    When you have water, why not make lemonade; obviously you don't always need lemons - and as when starting a poem, you don't always have to have the actual ingredients to make something that quenches the readers thirst. Your creativity flows pure as a bottle of spring water...
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    Teardrops commented on Bottles of Lemonade

    10-13-2010

    You stated as pure water then things in life (lemonade ) soured you on life . Never give up on life it will surprise you in many ways . Great poem my friend Marie
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    Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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