Hell

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Hell

Hell is a corner street bar.

Monochromatic.

Rust colored smoke

And dimly lit pool tables.

An elderly woman sits behind a microphone,

Timing her words to the clack of the cue ball scratch.

The bartender stares at his customers,

Swirling a rag around the inside

Of a spotless shot glass.

There’s a story here,

In red eyes and monotony,

But no one likes to write a tragedy.

Between the cracks of the creaking wooden floors

You’ll hear a sickly, taunting voice,

Reminding you “No one’s leaving.”

Sitting on an unsteady bar stool,

Looking out tobacco blackened windows,

The sullen can remember their sins.

And the once famous woman sings a song of togetherness,

To the fallen apart.

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hope commented on Hell

01-29-2013

This poem of yours is kind of interesting. My reasons are that one a lot of the people on planet earth nowadays dont believe heaven and hell is real. so i think we should be writing poems more on Heaven and Hell so that. many people who believe they exist as a a result of an accident or as a result of a big explosion, will know that they are making a big mistake. GOD IS REAL. HEAVEN AND HELL ARE REAL THEIR SOULS WILL EXIST AFTER THEY DIE HERE ON EARTH. THEY WILL FIND THAT THEY STILL EXIST AFTER DEATH, THE QUESTION IS WHERE ARE THEY GOING TO SPEND ETERNITY.

Dano commented on Hell

04-19-2010

"And the once famous woman sings a song of togetherness, To the fallen apart."... vivid imagry...nicely written

kweenofcnfusion

04/19/2010

It's based on a dream I had when I was little. Thank you for the feedback :)

Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

kweenofcnfusion’s Poems (27)

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Playground 0
Uninspired 1
Hell 2
Leaving 0
They Say 1
Good To Know 2
Just Stare 4
Happiness 1
I Came Home 1
About You 2
My Mistake 3
The Car 1
I Am Okay 1
I'm Still In Love With [The Idea Of] You 2
Let's Never Forget 2
If you only knew how much you helped 3
My Heart Still Belongs To You 5
Things I'd Never Tell You Matter the Most 1
Sisters 1
Jenny I Want You To Know 2
FailureTale 1
Freezer Burn 1
What is That? 1
Did We Just... 2
Don't Remind Me 2
I Saw You Today 3
Prendre le Vie 2