The Third Star
Autumn fog dims light
Perched against the dead of night
Are the stars pale bright
Perched against the dead of night
Are the stars pale bright
The Third Star
21 Comments
Tags: Nature
- Miriam
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BCP commented on The Third Star
08-09-2009
- MIRIAM, YES YOU HAVE WRITTEN A HAIKU WHICH IS WHAT I FO SOMETIMES TO. I MEAN THAT I ALL THERE IS TO SAY. LOVE TO WORK WITHYOU DEAR ONE. BRENDA YOU HAVE A GIFTED TALENT, JUST NEEDS SOME GUIDES. BRENDA
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RHPeat commented on The Third Star
07-17-2009
- Haiku syllable count. Seasonal change word in Autumn fog, a strong haiku Interesting Oxymoron on the ending as well (pale bright) it gives dimness yet it offers a sparkling feeling. time passing into renewal. The image as a whole is like a snapshot which is complete for the Haiku form. Nice poem Miriam. A poet friend// RH Peat
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Hanna commented on The Third Star
06-29-2009
- isn't this a haiku? It is meant to be short-only 17 syllables in fact! This was very well done and excellent in form.
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d2wice commented on The Third Star
06-28-2009
- short. intresting but you need to establish better what you are righting about.
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Lucho commented on The Third Star
06-26-2009
- I like it. Short sweet and to the point. Keep it up
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