The End

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  • Sadness

    The End
    we yell
    we smile
    we fall
    down into the deep, dark pit of the ocean
    the bubbles rise as we fall
    down, down below
    we had it all
    but we did fall
    down into the deep, dark pit of the ocean
    the light dims, the air fades
    down, down below
    now i'm confused
    i don't know what to do, because we fell
    down into the deep, dark pit of the ocean
    darkness surrounds
    unknown creatures are found
    down, down below
    so i will say
    i love you anyway, it's just that we fell
    down into the deep, dark, bottomless pit of the ocean

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    caspiancri commented on The End

    03-10-2009

    reading this i felt like i was falling too
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    TheAngelOfDeath commented on The End

    03-05-2009

    nice poem but reapeating lines ruin the eleqincy of poetry. it makes it more like song peotry then but i deserves a 9 great job. Grim
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    MsPoeticJustice commented on The End

    03-05-2009

    nice write. i sometimes feel like i fell deep in a dark ocean. love how you expressed you emotions
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    If I feel physically as if the top of my head were taken off, I know that is poetry.

    Emily Dickinson (1830-1886) American poet.

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