Take My Picture When I'm Sleep

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    Take My Picture When I'm Sleep

     

    　

    Take My Picture When I'm Sleep

     

    　

    As I lay down to sleep to rest

    that's when my thinking is paused

    and I have no cause

    to be upset.

     

    I need you to take my picture now

    because now I'm at my best.

    the sounds are absent

    and I'm at peace

    I need not mention

    I'm at attention

    because I'm asleep.

     

    The stars will still shine

    the moon will glow

    the picture you show

    everyone will know

    I'm at my best

    because I'm asleep

    to rest.

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    rmlee commented on Take My Picture When I'm Sleep

    11-03-2009

    this is deep,you go girl,there is so like much ok.
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    captaininsight commented on Take My Picture When I'm Sleep

    08-30-2009

    I enjoy the meter of this work. I would love to hear it read out loud by the author. I interperate the subject as having passed on , at her best, with G-d , the last verse , heavenly conotation. I loved it and It made me feel peaceful as well. Nice piece.
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    tsgirl

    08/30/2009

    Hi Captaininsight, yeah thanks for your comment, after I wrote that poem,I realized how it could be interpreted as having passed on, but fortunately it's about a living soul.

    tsgirl

    08/31/2009

    P.S. you can see my book at amazon.com entitled Journey Of Life by Joyce Lee Thank you

    fred1932 commented on Take My Picture When I'm Sleep

    08-27-2009

    baby, i like this poem. it reminded me of looking at my lady when she sleeps
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    tsgirl

    08/31/2009

    Hi, thanks for the comment, you can view the book entitled Journey Of Life by Joyce Lee or for the contents www.lulu.com/joy4luv

    SmileyAngel138 commented on Take My Picture When I'm Sleep

    08-27-2009

    beautiful and sweet..there is something about being at peace when were sleeping...another great job :-)
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    Clementinewoods commented on Take My Picture When I'm Sleep

    08-24-2009

    I guess this is when most of us are at our best; while drifting into la-la land. Great write; thanks for sharing!!! Keep dreaming and be blessed!!!
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    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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