My Goodbye

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    Heres to alcoholism and the detructive path it leaves in its wake.I am sad to lose my childhood friend to this disease but for my families sake I have to walk away this time.

    (If you are reading this and you know who you are know that I love you and always will. Understand I am not doing this to you but for them and in a way for you too.)

    My Goodbye

     I built my life upon a mountain side I thought it was sturdy and strong
    I trusted it to keep me safe but i am finding I was wrong
    I knew there were some cracks and caves that were yet a mystery to me
    but little did I know till now that nothing was what it seemed

    For 15 years that mountain trembled but to the danger I was blind
    I thought it just was not that bad and pushed the truth from my mind
    now 15 years later as I struggle to run from a mountain who's fall is assured
    Crumbling under a disease from withing that cannot be cured

    If I had paid attention sooner could I have saved the friend I hold so dear?
    To late the damage is done and my heart is filled with pain and fear
    Tears streak my face and horror fills my eyes
    helplessly I stand back and watch my friends demise

    15 years of loyalty has all been laid to waste
    as the one I called my best friend spews filth into my face
    15 years of friendship and innocence slips away
    because this destruction is by her choice this time I can not stay

    Years will pass my heart will forget but my mind will always know
    and when she reaches for a hand back up I wonder who will show
    It wont be me no not this time although it pains me to say
    where she is going i cannot follow so i will not look back as I walk away


    I loved her then as I love her now but love just cannot save

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    ESSENCEOFLOVE commented on My Goodbye

    12-08-2010

    The honesty and the power of this poem cannot be overlooked. Alcoholism is a problem a lot of people face. You described beautifully this disease with such grace and honesty. Thank you for sharing your story..........E
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    Chaos128 commented on My Goodbye

    03-30-2010

    People always feel as if they could have, or should have dome more, and guilt gnaws at the soul because of it. Sometimes, though, you've got to face the possibility that the only thing you might have accomplished is going down the drain with the person you tried save. Powerful work!
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    DeepEclipse commented on My Goodbye

    10-20-2009

    Damn hellova ending. Sad to have to part paths but each has their own. Gripping write written with good meter. I had a stepdad that was an alchoholic. At fist I hated him when I was younger, but as I grew I started to feel sorry for him. You pour this out well, depicting everything.
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    mistymo commented on My Goodbye

    08-24-2009

    Wow this really hit home...maybe sometime we can chat
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