Catching my breathe

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    Catching my breathe

                        I have the makings for a disaster, wrapped up inside me. All swirled up in a cloud. The thick gray rope like cloud feels almost to strangle me.
               I caught my breathe and inhale a sweet smell like rain.Catching my breathe once more and squirm to brake free, I feel water drip down on me.
                     I stop myself from any further panic as I open my eyes to see I've been dreaming. Wrapped in my sheet drenched in sweat, I wonder what happen to me?

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    lithiumblack commented on Catching my breathe

    02-26-2010

    Good imagery here, but I feel it could have had more of an impact if it were a bit longer, but that's just a suggestion, not a critique. I recommend watching your spelling a bit in the future, but hey, pobody's nerfect ;) Overall, a good piece of work. Keep it up!
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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