All it takes is one rhyme

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    All it takes is one rhyme

     So let's take this time
    To relax and unwind
    Let's revisit my mind
    And may I remind
    How I'm feeling inside
    A deeper thought, a simple rhyme
    Must they hide
    When your unkind
    But it's ok, I'm feeling fine
    So let me feed you this next line
    Have I been so blind
    Drank the passion from your wine
    And what do I find?
    Not a love that's mine
    But an affair that's combined
    But may I be so inclined
    Express my words without being declined
    Once a lover so divine
    Walked away, I'm left behind
    Love is...? Can you define?
    Were the stars misaligned?
    Or was your heart too confined?
    Refresh your thoughts with this underline
    We were once INTERTWINED
    So sit back and let yourself recline
    Take a moment to rewind
    Before you start to refine
    Quickly changing and redesigned
    Let your heart be the fruit and the past your rind
    Peel it away and let unbind
    And take this outline
    Let the stars realign
    Together we can redefine

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    SilverGirl commented on All it takes is one rhyme

    11-06-2009

    Nice rhythm.. It flows very nicely. You have one type though. "When your unkind" should read you're. Other than that you have done a great job. Keep on writing.. I've a feeling you have lots to say.. Hugs.. SG
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    kage commented on All it takes is one rhyme

    11-06-2009

    Kage here , great rhyme it all works together i like it keep writing ill keep reading
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    cjmason commented on All it takes is one rhyme

    11-06-2009

    That was a great poem you have a gift for writing and it sounds like your poem comes from a personal experience? I really enjoyed reading it
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    dmc1259

    11/06/2009

    Thank you very much :), I am glad you liked it. It is definitely from personal experience. As are all my poems.

    In science one tries to tell people, in such a way as to be understood by everyone, something that no one ever knew before. But in poetry, it's the exact opposite.

    Franz Kafka (1883-1924) Czech writer.

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