A Better Place

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    A Better Place

    I’m on my own
    Standing all alone.
    I’m sitting and thinking of you,
    But somehow I knew
    That you would not stay long;
    But I must remain strong.
    All the good times we had,
    They weren’t all that bad.
    We had so much fun;
    The two of us couldn’t be undone.
    Somewhere along the path we took
    A wrong turn that shook
    Our relationship to the ground,
    But as I stare at this mound
    I remember it all so well.
    The times we had were swell;
    All until that dreadful night
    When you let out a yell of fright.
    A car was on the wrong side,
    But I could not hide.
    The driver was drunk
    And in the seat you sunk.
    Why did it have to be you?
    I was one of the few
    That would have taken your spot.
    The man who did this should be shot.
    As I drop the flower on the mound,
    There is not a sound.
    I miss you so,
    But in a way I know
    That you’re in a better place.
    I hope you save me a space;
    I’ll be with you soon.
    As I stare at the moon,
    I feel the joy I once had
    When you and I were glad.
    We were together at last,
    But how you went so fast.
    Death I no longer fear,
    For I loved you so dear.

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    calijya commented on A Better Place

    11-07-2009

    that was really beautiful. i hope its not based on real events. u r very talented.

    Keiko commented on A Better Place

    08-15-2009

    All I can say is great!!!! I have read I few of your poems now and you are really good. I do not even have a question about it you need to get published, there is no trying about it. You are that great.

    keithrberryjr

    08/15/2009

    Thank You for your comment.I am actually in the process of trying to publish now.I have just been too busy to do so.

    Krystle commented on A Better Place

    08-06-2009

    Okay so I think that you are sooooo talented!! You need to try to get published!! These are amazing and are a lot different from the typical poems that are so much alike!!

    minigirl695 commented on A Better Place

    08-06-2009

    Oh Keith, this is a fantastic poem. I felt the emotions that you put through in this poem. I'm sorry for the loss, I am. But this is a great poem. I love it. =) ~{@ Lia Cake @}~

    keithrberryjr

    08/06/2009

    The thing that captures most people about this poem is that it didnt happen to me and I dont know anyone that had it happen to them.I created a situation and put myself into it.

    Perianpoint commented on A Better Place

    06-15-2009

    Deeply resonating! Insightful, revealing, and artfully written. I felt honored to have read your poem.

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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