Yours.

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  • Love
    • lebara
    • just waiting for the boring introduction of the story that is my life to end

    Poem Commentary

    this is sorta the revised & editied version. my original was way more chilidish/kiddy. thank you thesaurus.

    Yours.

    Shall i compare thee to a summer's day?
    No; thats sound too much like shakespeare.
    Yet even though you weren't written into a play,
    You're more amazing than any line or poem i'll ever hear.

    More inspiring than a clear winter morning,
    More extraordinary than a star filled night.
    Your skin so cozy it's almost alarming;
    I find it hard not to hold you so tight.

    You may be asking yourself why i'm telling you this;
    that you're amazing and more unique than the stars shown.
    Well, it's pretty simple really. What i'm trying to say is
    That i want to be yours, and yours alone.


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    JaleesaSoco commented on Yours.

    02-11-2010

    I am in love with this poem. This is very gentle and it makes me feel like....awwwwwwwwwww. lol. Good job. Really good job. :)

    KtIrish commented on Yours.

    11-02-2009

    This is awesome. It's very frank and direct. Honest and simple. Very well written.

    ginga commented on Yours.

    11-02-2009

    lebara, I like that you lay your heart on the line. I also like conversational style poems. Keep up the good work. Write often and with joy! ginga

    To have great poets there must be great audiences too.

    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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