You;

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  • Love
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  • Passion
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  • Fantasy
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  • Relationship
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  • Romance

    Poem Commentary

    this poem is the first in a long time that sort of popped in my head almost put together by itself.  Of course i changed a few things but i love the way it came out and i hope you will too.  It may get a lil confusing so just in case, picture the word you in front of each capital word, that was how i planned to set it up easier :) lol

    You;

     Make me laugh
    Make me cry
    with parting words of goodbye.
    Make me strong
    Make me weak
    with warm hands blessing my cheek
    Make me mad
    then fill me with joy,
    like a kid with some brand new toy.
    Make me see
    just want to be
    around
    and better
    What would i do
    without
    You
    Make me want
    Make me need
    this spell wrapped me in tight tweed
    Wont let me go
    but thats the best part
    Release words of love
    deep down from my heart
    <3

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    fmrdancer commented on You;

    10-04-2009

    Veri ingenious idea and beautifully written. I wish I could rhyme like that. I'm more of a narrative poet. I loved this.
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    CMarsh commented on You;

    09-07-2009

    Nicely done Frankee...wish mine came already done like yours did. Look forward to more of your work.
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    Frankee

    09/07/2009

    it was one of those long days where i couldnt sleep so at least i got something out of it but thanks

    EL26 commented on You;

    09-05-2009

    i like this alot it's a very fun poem keep up the good work
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    Frankee

    09/07/2009

    thanks

    Cerene commented on You;

    09-05-2009

    Great job on your poem Frankee. You have alot of talent for such a young age. Keep up the great work
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    Frankee

    09/06/2009

    thank you so much! i try :)

    photochick commented on You;

    09-02-2009

    well it was not confusing at all to me great job for something that formed its self its very good nice flow enjoyed it a lot cant wait to see what more you have written keep up the great work
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    Frankee

    09/02/2009

    Thank you so much

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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