When The Time Comes

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    When The Time Comes
    My time is with you,My mind is with you,I give my all to you.May my eyes water from missing you.may my heart beat stronger,For I'm waitting for you.My feelings for you will last forever.I will lay my head down on my pillow and dream about you.I have a lot of time on my hands.When the time comes.I willlay my feelings down for you.We can do what our hearts feel.When the time comes


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    mmichelle97219 commented on When The Time Comes

    02-14-2009

    This is a good train of thought, but I must say how it is formatted is more like prose than poetry. There is a lack of meter and readable beat as it is right now. With some tweaking this can be outstanding. Michelle
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    grumpymom commented on When The Time Comes

    02-14-2009

    ???? Are you hoping some chic will read this and be moved???
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    Walt Whitman, American Poet (1819-1892)

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