Water and fire

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  • Passion

    Water and fire
    What if you and I
    Wade in water to our
    Waistbands splashing wildly as we
    Wrapped hand in hand you
    Wrenching your power over me,
    With devilish desire of your
    Wild male lust thrust us,
    Wickedly into water submerging selves.
    Wantonly submissive floating in my
    Watery bower exhausting hunger each
    Wearied by cooling creek both,
    Wrapped gasping embraced as one.

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    DeepEclipse commented on Water and fire

    07-01-2010

    Tight shit. Clever use of the -W-. And the impressive thing is it didn't sound forced. Or repetitive. Creative use. The poem itself was like serene contentment and sporadic passion molded into one moment. Nice.
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    boomboom56 commented on Water and fire

    09-10-2009

    Hot stuff!!! Lust is captured in your words. You can almost feel the cool water splashing about. You have brought back good memories for me, thank you.
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    Tortuga commented on Water and fire

    07-20-2009

    Masterful alliteration; the implicit but invisible fire; watery wantonness. Photo works well.
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    Trailmixed commented on Water and fire

    05-23-2009

    The one is what I follow. I like very much the our in this stringy-lined poem I appreciate your collaboration and look forward our future poems:D ~Good life may nature always be one to our soul.
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    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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