Us together

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    Us together
    Peaceful pleasures;
    peaceful times together.
    Wanting more;
    wanting what is given.
    Selfish thoughts;
    selfish wants for me and you.
    Craving lust;
    craving what is not given.
    Needing this;
    needing to be with you.
    Questioning thoughts;
    questioning what will be given.
    Knowing me;
    knowing I want to be with you.
    Peaceful pleasures;
    peaceful times together.

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    WordSlinger commented on Us together

    03-09-2009

    Pleasurable
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    Equity commented on Us together

    02-26-2009

    Not sure where you're going with this. But like the style and flow. Sooo much seems to be hidden from the writing. Maybe to close to express, yet. Suggestion: take this experience and your unfulfilled desires, feelings and needs, then write about them as meeting your goal for a better life. The object is to try to look beyond the ecperiences, to see ourselves.
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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