The White Room

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    This is the orginal White Room piece that I had written prior to The White Room(Sequel).

    The White Room

    In the white room where it all goes down, where nothing can be heard, not even a sound. Voices call from in my mind, telling me I am alone, telling me I am blind. With every breathe I take in, I become more and more like them. I become a slave, a heartless soul, I feel as a fish in the confides of a bowl. It is time, the lights go out, the door opens, and I scream and shout. They cannot hear me, there is not a doubt, seeing the faces the hold me here. I see them smile from ear to ear they see I'm bound; nothing to fear. With my blank stare; hoping I am lost and never to be found. These faces, these lifeless souls lift me arm and arm, leading me where they please, I cant move, fight, or resist, I'm no threat, no use for those fists, the halls seem endless, seeming to lead nowhere, finally we reach a door, which reads "Middle of nowhere", could this be real? Could this be true? A door to nowhere is better than here. I did not care I just knew I wanted out of there. I'm starting to feel alive, I'm starting to move; I think I'm awake, I'm coming to. Not bound by a jacket, not bound by a chain, I still pretend and play the game. Waiting for the time, and all the time to kill, these faces lead me along a path, up a hill, and down a road. Being led to where I do not know; like a flash I break from there grip, running through the hills hoping that I do not trip. I make my way into the town. As I walk and look around no people there like me. Everything was different but everyone was the same. I closed my eyes and counted to two. I heard a voice saying “Hey you, When I awoke and my eyes where clear, I was in shock I had never left here. My mind lost, I'm hoping to be found. Can someone help me grip reality? Am I stuck like this forever? Forever is a long time especially for me!

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    jiminyCRITiX commented on The White Room

    02-22-2010

    I felt as though I were watching a Terantino movie in my mind.

    mourningfawn commented on The White Room

    06-28-2009

    frightening thrilling beautiful I was with you every step

    Miriam commented on The White Room

    06-28-2009

    this poem gave me chills. Its very well written. Great job

    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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