smoke

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this is my attempt at describing a train :)

smoke

Hot, sweating fuel

Black as the souls below

A race where there is no end

Just a tear a kiss cannot mend

 

Man and nature collide

In a feud of old technology

An honest man’s labor

An escape from a friendly neighbor

 

An abandoned building

Once a lively place for conversation

People come and people go

Directions all the citizens know

 

Come, climb on quick

Before the metal tracks are bare

All pay a small toll

Where the great fighter taught the tadpole

 

Soothing noises, bumpy road

Beating or not, does it matter?

You can’t stop a driven mind

When the driven are willingly blind

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Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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