"My Tears"

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    "My Tears"

    My tears are falling and I seem unable to control their flow, My tears are falling because I truly miss you so.

    The thought of you brings them streaming from my eyes, From the time that I lie down at night, to the time in the morn that I rise.

    My heart cries out from the pain that it feels, and until you return it will never heal.

    I constantly have thoughts of you running through my mind, But when I open my eyes you I cannot seem to find.

    My tears are falling and I seem unable to control their flow, My tears are falling because I truly miss you so.

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    SuperChick76 commented on "My Tears"

    10-13-2009

    The flow of the poem was nice, I noticed some grammar errors, though. "time in the that I rise" should probably be "when I rise," also, "But when I open my eyes you I cannot find" is incorrect. Play around with it a bit, and it'll come to you. Other than that, it was very nicely written, I enjoyed reading it greatly. Good job! :D
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    mssweetella

    10/14/2009

    thanks for your input, it is greatly appreciated.

    Poetry is not an expression of the party line. It's that time of night, lying in bed, thinking what you really think, making the private world public, that's what the poet does.

    Allen Ginsberg (1926-1997) U.S. poet.

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