pain

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    pain
    he took him off this desert plain
    out of sight and out of pain
    the day will end in pain and sorrow 'and that day will be tomorrow
    we may not like it
    and we may cry
    but him being in pain was hell to him
    so he laid down to say goodbye
    were lost without him
    so hurt and grim
    because we said goodbye to him

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    aysha commented on pain

    01-03-2011

    Pain comes to us all dear. The pain will all fade.Goodbye's never last forever. Wonderful poem
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    spbsdude commented on pain

    10-15-2009

    I take the him to be Jesus Christ, but I'm not certain I'm right in assuming this. I don't know why, but that is what I thought of when I read it. Of course Christ suffered more pain than any mortal man can realize when he took the sins of the world upon him. Pain is a great motivator for writing, because when we are in pain we can be real, and letting it out on the page can help us heal. (The rhyme is accidental) Still nice job.
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    tinamgoode commented on pain

    09-18-2009

    Very nice write! Our loses are blessings, not punishments. I feel the loss. Read my peom. Dana.... My Angel! You may like it. Peace & Smiles!
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    keller commented on pain

    08-02-2009

    the pain is what motivates us to write,its like a soaring in our soul.the more painful the subject to better the write.This was very good.
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    optimistic commented on pain

    06-17-2009

    Well written poem I thought kind of took me back to painful times yet some happiness from important people in your life. Good write.
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    Poetry is what gets lost in translation.

    Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.

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