Love Lost

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    Love Lost

     .: u stopp`d acting like my girlfriend
    because your not my girlfriend ,
    but when you where my girlfriend
    you were`nt acting like my girlfriend ,
    thats why i liked you better when you where just acting like my girlfriend ,
    but deep down inside i want & need
    you as my girlfriend ,
    & if not then i guess it`z my fault ,
    & ill try 2 win the rest but for now it`z love lost:.

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    grandis commented on Love Lost

    06-25-2009

    This one cool but I think u should add more also maybe make the flow clever. Use metaphors and some symbolism try not make it so obvious. I hope that helps
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    grandis

    06/25/2009

    I meant to not make it so obvious.

    DrAcrite

    06/25/2009

    yea i was thinkin the same . honestly didnt really put that much time and effort into that 1 but thanx 4 the advise

    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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