~ Going Down Ms. Jarrell? ~

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  • Emotional
    • TopaazMoons
    • Flittering from flower to flower. Staying only long enough to sniff the perfume and I'm off once more.

    Poem Commentary

    This Poem is about the downward inner fall into depression.

    ~ Going Down Ms. Jarrell? ~
    Going Down?
        Doors open..
                  Watch your step! 
           Empty...
                                            Hollow shell...
                   Gated doors clang shut...
           Behind me...
                                                                     No Exit!
           Frightened...
                                                                           Down...
                                                                              Down...
                                               Down...
                                    Sinking!
                   Alone...
    Troubled...
                  Free Falling...
        
    Downward...
                  Crash!
       Pain...
    Sorrow...
        Despair...
    loneliness...
        Darkness..
            
             Void....
                 Invisiable..
                     Hidden...
    Can’t focus! 
                   Can’t see! 
         Wet...
                Raining....
                          Sprinkle...
    Torrential....
             Flooding!
                   No Rope! 
                      No help...
         No rescue...
    On my own...
                          Again!
    Light spotted!
    Run! 
       Faster...
         Faster...

           Faster... 
     
             Must catch up to the light! 
       Almost there...
    Trip...
    Fall...
    Light Fading...
         vanishing....
    Disappeared....
                                                Stumple forward....
    Going down? 

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    dahlusion commented on ~ Going Down Ms. Jarrell? ~

    02-23-2010

    While going down, be sure to hold your breath so you can come back up to enjoy life.
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    DeepEclipse commented on ~ Going Down Ms. Jarrell? ~

    02-18-2010

    Interesting format. Was like the scramble to keep hold of the sanity. The way you wrote it really symbolized the agony of trying to hold on, until the grip is gone.
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    TopaazMoons

    02/18/2010

    Ty Deep. :0)

    1990lh commented on ~ Going Down Ms. Jarrell? ~

    02-18-2010

    hahaha luv ur style very cool read and the concept was pretty good
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    TopaazMoons

    02/18/2010

    Ty 1990lh :0)

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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