Drowning

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    Drowning

    I woke up with my toes covered in water.
    It's strange but not alarming.
    A little annoyed, I get ready for the day.
    It is just a little water.
    I can handle this.

    I opened the front door; the flood rushed in.
    Waist deep in the icy water, I shiver.
    I had no idea it was there.
    Nothing to worry about, it's just a little water.
    I can handle this.

    I passed through my front gate.
    The ground slopes; my head is barely above the water.
    I start to worry. This can't be good.
    Drawing on my own strength I keep moving.
    I can handle this.

    I continue on tiptoes, but the ground disappears.
    I struggle, but I'm sinking fast.
    Frightened, I'm fighting, but losing.
    My hope is starting to fade.
    I can handle this.

    I can't see the surface.
    I am weak from the struggle.
    I am not sure if I can fight anymore.
    Not living, not dying, slowly drowning from my troubles.
    I can't handle this.

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    hoth2o commented on Drowning

    07-26-2009

    Physical or psychological? very descriptive and can take you to either place..

    mmichelle97219

    07/26/2009

    I am glad you liked it. Thanks so much Michelle

    Phoenix9 commented on Drowning

    02-17-2009

    gave it a 10, excellant write

    riceryder commented on Drowning

    02-17-2009

    wow great job felt like i was there with you

    When power leads man towards arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the area of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.

    John F. Kennedy (1917-1963) Thirty-fifth President of the USA

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