Dizzy

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    I'm not sure about the title. There's a couple lines I don't like either, but I'm new at this.

    Dizzy
    When I'm near you I feel dizzy 
    My memory won't work 
    Afraid to speak my mind 
    You might see me as a jerk 
    My hands are cold
    My head is hot
    I can't control my shaking 
    Cause it's control I haven't got 
    We all have flaws people just can't resist 
    So why is it so easy 
    To forget that yours exist?
    When I'm near you I feel dizzy 
    My memory won't work 
     
    Afraid to speak my mind 
    You might see me as a jerk 
     
    My hands are cold
    My head is hot
     
    I can't control my shaking 
    Cause it's control I haven't got 
     
    We all have flaws
    We just can't resist 
     
    But why is it so easy 
    To forget that yours exist?

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    ClearlySays commented on Dizzy

    01-30-2011

    You know if you really are new at writing you do it very well. It was a sweet account of admiration, & the ending was my favorite part.
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    Poetry is either something that lives like fire inside you or else it is nothing, an empty formalized bore around which pedants can endlessly drone their notes and explanations.

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