Death is a Friend

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  • Death
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  • Loss
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  • Dark Poetry
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  • My Feelings
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  • Thought Provoking
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  • Hurt

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    Hey... I wrote this when i was sixteen, and going through some issues that were affecting me negatively and writing was an outlet for emotions that I couldn't express in any other way. So I'm just looking for any comments and educational criticism. Is it any good at all? Does it express itself clearly? Any ideas on improving my writing? Thank you in advance =)

    Death is a Friend

     A soft little touch, 
     Some say is she. 
    It doesn't hurt, much, 
     And soon you'll be free. 
    From all of lives pain. 
     All thats been given for naught, 
    Which we never did gain. 
     All for which we have sought. 
    Quickly She'll come, 
     Death is a Friend. 
    Slower for some, 
     Death is My Friend. 

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    BlackLabel commented on Death is a Friend

    12-26-2013

    Very insightful feelings on death. Using only 12 lines, you really captured some feelings it takes many hundreds to explain. It's even more impressing that you wrote this when you were sixteen...well done!
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    CountryComet

    12/26/2013

    Thanks! I appreciate the feed back =)

    Poetry comes nearer to vital truth than history.

    Plato (BC 427-BC 347) Greek philosopher.

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