A journey of love

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  • Lost Love
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  • Sadness

    Poem Commentary

    This poem is about being heart broken by - a heart breaker. Then even though you have found another love you still care when you hear he is with someone new. But know he will break her heart too. But after all this you still can't shake him from your thoughts.

    A journey of love

    He built his house on foundation's ready to break and descend into the sea,

    On the edge of a cliff he stole my heart, designed to weak to break his fall.

    He didn't see my savoir waiting in the distance holding my rose, His anchor set in sand ready to save my dying sole.

    He sales a steady ship made of steel, never would it let me down?


    I sailed past your whispers just the other day the sea turned dead as night,

    It told me you've re-built your house, standing tall and bright.

    I know that after time your floor will crumble beneth her wings, she can't see your foundations will never change.

    But still in my dreams I will always go back, forever haunting your halls wailing

    THIS HOUSE IS TAINTED BLACK

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    connsk8 commented on A journey of love

    09-22-2009

    This was very good, keep writing and perfecting your rtalent, for you do have talent, I am impressed!!
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    hightower92277 commented on A journey of love

    09-15-2009

    creative use of words, that would make a good story.
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    SpiritSong commented on A journey of love

    09-15-2009

    You have a wonderful talent L2Ex..you have a natural gift for finding and articulating words as does a true born artist. This poem has maturity written all through it.. great emotional pics drawn with your words, and imagery, sights, and sounds, smells and expressions of the deep heart and soul. a few typing errors, so easily corrected..sole should be=(soul), sale=(sail)...other than that very good write...really enjoyed reading it and noticed your talent right off the bat...you have a gift keep planting that seed...the abundant harvest is on the way..thank you for sharing it and have a wonderful day..Tina, "SpiritSong"
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    SpiritSong

    09/15/2009

    Oh...and a bit larger Font size, whould sure help me ole tired eyes to read it easier as well;)!! have a great week...SpiritSong

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