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05-04-2013 at 01:47:33 AM

Please critique my poem

Hard to Love


You're not an easy man to love
Even with those eyes bluer than the skies above
I had just begun to think we'd be fine
Now I'm almost certain you'll never be mine.
I feel the harder I try the harder you try to push me away
Yet I won't give up on you, try as I may.
Waiting to hear from you my stomach ties in knots,
Wondering how often or how little I'm in your thoughts.
Is the only time you think of me is when I hear from you?
Oh the answer to this I wish I knew.
But as hard as you can make loving you be,
It seems to come so naturally for me.

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10-27-2013 at 12:41:11 PM

RE: Please critique my poem

This poem indeed reveals a girl's mind
When I was a young man, no Internet
No cell or no proper information at all
We were in the dark about a woman
We were blinded by many Injustices
Thank God, now a woman can express
Her feelings, she can boldly convey
I love this poem and enjoyed it truly.

mvvenkataraman

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Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion.

T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.
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