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Please critique my style

11-18-2009 at 10:17:20 PM

Please critique my style

I've posted two of my poems on this site....but no one has commented yet =[. Could anybody read them and critique me and my style? I want to improve my writing...you guys got any suggestions? =x

The true philosopher and the true poet are one, and a beauty, which is truth, and a truth, which is beauty, is the aim of both.

Ralph Waldo Emerson, American Poet (1803-1882)