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Re: Sea BassQuote: Hi. Poetography, This is a nice narrrative piece. But what happens after the line: Originally Posted by poetography Sea Bass He's not really a waiter And not the bus boy He's not the cook or kitchen assistant And he doesn't work The bar or the register He is just Sea Bass The seafood restaurant overlooking the atlantic and Hampton bay is ruled not by The owner but the manager Head waitress and stocky woman Who talks constantly in a Controlling way that's nice And keep order at the same time The owner Bill in his eighties. Soft spoken would never cross her and he is a rugged ole ex fisherman A commercial fishing boat chugged by my window seat and I asked her what are they bringing in. And she knew right away Thay are black netters yea they're called black netter that means they are dragging for sdcallops. They're scallopers yea I ordered scallops. And oysters because she told me the oyster come from peconic bay and that's right here and near the fampus blue point oysters His real name is Sebastion but she calls him Sea Bass and if this restaurant were some sort of corporation I would say that sea bass was her personal assistant or luitenant or right arm or .. He's just really loyal. Sea bass has found his place in the world "and keep order at the same time"??? Is it an explanatory note about the poem, or is it a part of the poem??? If it is a note, then, it is advisable to give it space away from the poem and a caption, If it is a part of the poem, then the lines are much , much too long. They are prose sentences , and not blank verse poetry. I like the concluding line: "Sea Bass has found his place in the world." Very effective concluding line. " |
Poetry is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality.
T. S. Eliot (1888-1965) American-English poet and playwright.