Wilted Love
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Wilted Love If I gave you a rose, |
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Re: Wilted LoveWilted Love |
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Originally Posted by RHPeat Wilted Love Is it the rags in the heart that wilt, with the decree of remembrance where days decayed like leaves, or lit candles held inside darkness? I've seen what flames can do to tissue paper as it becomes shriveled ash. I've found the hours to wane while waiting for love to arrive on a late train. I've felt my hopes droop when love walked out the door into another's impassioned arms. I've known the petals of daffodils to sag from weeks inside a dry vase. I've seen their withered parts fall on truth's linen fabric. I've watched how a pale lilac dress fades in the light of passing years. I know those limp and swollen eyelids held inside lonely nights. I've seen the Iris wrinkle up in heat to show the fragile lips of wonder, where the brief caress in silken touch retreats within wilted Love. © RH Peat 7/6/09 10:00 pm form 6 quatrains, 24 lines |
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Re: Wilted LovePeat this is peur wilted love and everything else. I am spellbound! |
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Re: Wilted LoveA Haiku |
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Re: Wilted LoveI like those additional 2 lines Peat, as always thanks for your poetic verse. |
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Re: Wilted Lovelike a dead flower |
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Originally Posted by RHPeat A Renga: Feel free to copy it and add to it: place your name above the 2 or 3 lines you add. The stanza form is like a Haiku called a hokku which is followed by two 7 syllable lines by another poet. Whatever you write, only relates to the the group of lines just above it, like a tree growing different leaves on the same branch. A renga continues to alternate 3-line/2-line stanzas throughout, never following a stanza with one of the same length. A syllable count like this: (5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7) and so on. Each (parenthesis can be a different poet). You can only repeat after someone else has written. The point being that you are forced to deal what the other poet has written. Traditionally it is like a game to make it hard for the person that follows. A Renga// On Wilted love Ginga Beaten by raindrops Lightning crushed my tainted love I sit in silence RH Peat The black iris is for death: A dry snow covers the ground Ginga Iced iris stiffens In the subzero wasteland All love becomes numb |
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Re: Re: Wilted LoveQuote: Quote: DevaAmidoOriginally Posted by RHPeat A Renga: Feel free to copy it and add to it: place your name above the 2 or 3 lines you add. The stanza form is like a Haiku called a hokku which is followed by two 7 syllable lines by another poet. Whatever you write, only relates to the the group of lines just above it, like a tree growing different leaves on the same branch. A renga continues to alternate 3-line/2-line stanzas throughout, never following a stanza with one of the same length. A syllable count like this: (5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7) and so on. Each (parenthesis can be a different poet). You can only repeat after someone else has written. The point being that you are forced to deal what the other poet has written. Traditionally it is like a game to make it hard for the person that follows. A Renga// On Wilted love Ginga Beaten by raindrops Lightning crushed my tainted love I sit in silence RH Peat The black iris is for death: A dry snow covers the ground Ginga Iced iris stiffens In the subzero wasteland All love becomes numb RH Peat the sigh is barren landscape: failure the sharpness of cold Bright pink then onyx Turned the hues of my heartstrings The day I lost you Last edited by devaamido 07-28-2009 at 09:45:01 PM |
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Originally Posted by RHPeat A Renga: Feel free to copy it and add to it: place your name above the 2 or 3 lines you add. The stanza form is like a Haiku called a hokku which is followed by two 7 syllable lines by another poet. Whatever you write, only relates to the the group of lines just above it, like a tree growing different leaves on the same branch. A renga continues to alternate 3-line/2-line stanzas throughout, never following a stanza with one of the same length. A syllable count like this: (5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7) and so on. Each (parenthesis can be a different poet). You can only repeat after someone else has written. The point being that you are forced to deal what the other poet has written. Traditionally it is like a game to make it hard for the person that follows. A Renga// On Wilted love Ginga Beaten by raindrops Lightning crushed my tainted love I sit in silence RH Peat The black iris is for death: A dry snow covers the ground Ginga Iced iris stiffens In the subzero wasteland All love becomes numb RH Peat the sigh is barren landscape: failure the sharpness of cold Ginga warm embracing melt water flows as love takes hold no longer wilted alive |
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Re: Wilted Lovesounds like a song by fiftycent |
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Originally Posted by ginga Originally Posted by RHPeat A Renga: Feel free to copy it and add to it: place your name above the 2 or 3 lines you add. The stanza form is like a Haiku called a hokku which is followed by two 7 syllable lines by another poet. Whatever you write, only relates to the the group of lines just above it, like a tree growing different leaves on the same branch. A renga continues to alternate 3-line/2-line stanzas throughout, never following a stanza with one of the same length. A syllable count like this: (5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7) and so on. Each (parenthesis can be a different poet). You can only repeat after someone else has written. The point being that you are forced to deal what the other poet has written. Traditionally it is like a game to make it hard for the person that follows. A Renga// On Wilted love Ginga Beaten by raindrops Lightning crushed my tainted love I sit in silence RH Peat The black iris is for death: A dry snow covers the ground Ginga Iced iris stiffens In the subzero wasteland All love becomes numb RH Peat the sigh is barren landscape: failure the sharpness of cold DevaAmido Bright pink then onyx Turned the hues of my heartstrings The day I lost you Ginga Lost, complacent fool, the sting Wilts beyond recognition |
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Originally Posted by RHPeat A Renga: Feel free to copy it and add to it: place your name above the 2 or 3 lines you add. The stanza form is like a Haiku called a hokku which is followed by two 7 syllable lines by another poet. Whatever you write, only relates to the the group of lines just above it, like a tree growing different leaves on the same branch. A renga continues to alternate 3-line/2-line stanzas throughout, never following a stanza with one of the same length. A syllable count like this: (5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7) and so on. Each (parenthesis can be a different poet). You can only repeat after someone else has written. The point being that you are forced to deal what the other poet has written. Traditionally it is like a game to make it hard for the person that follows. A Renga// On Wilted love Ginga Beaten by raindrops Lightning crushed my tainted love I sit in silence RH Peat The black iris is for death: A dry snow covers the ground Ginga Iced iris stiffens In the subzero wasteland All love becomes numb RH Peat the sigh is barren landscape: failure the sharpness of cold DevaAmido Bright pink then onyx Turned the hues of my heartstrings The day I lost you Ginga Lost, complacent fool, the sting Wilts beyond recognition Tenderpoison like a dead flower to long unwatered in the heat my love has wilted RHPeat The pulse hangs in summer’s heat In ticking time the sun burns hot Ginga warm embracing melt water flows as love takes hold no longer wilted alive Deaamido Exuberantly springing Twixt dead and fetid flowers |
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Re: Wilted LoveI live in the heat |
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Originally Posted by RHPeat Originally Posted by devaamido Originally Posted by RHPeat A Renga: Feel free to copy it and add to it: place your name above the 2 or 3 lines you add. The stanza form is like a Haiku called a hokku which is followed by two 7 syllable lines by another poet. Whatever you write, only relates to the the group of lines just above it, like a tree growing different leaves on the same branch. A renga continues to alternate 3-line/2-line stanzas throughout, never following a stanza with one of the same length. A syllable count like this: (5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7) and so on. Each (parenthesis can be a different poet). You can only repeat after someone else has written. The point being that you are forced to deal what the other poet has written. Traditionally it is like a game to make it hard for the person that follows. A Renga// On Wilted love Ginga Beaten by raindrops Lightning crushed my tainted love I sit in silence RH Peat The black iris is for death: A dry snow covers the ground Ginga Iced iris stiffens In the subzero wasteland All love becomes numb RH Peat the sigh is barren landscape: failure the sharpness of cold DevaAmido Bright pink then onyx Turned the hues of my heartstrings The day I lost you Ginga Lost, complacent fool, the sting Wilts beyond recognition Tenderpoison like a dead flower to long unwatered in the heat my love has wilted RHPeat The pulse hangs in summer’s heat In ticking time the sun burns hot Ginga warm embracing melt water flows as love takes hold no longer wilted alive Deaamido Exuberantly springing Twixt dead and fetid flowers RH Peat An eye slips open the leaves and stems uncurl roots unwind through earth Devaamido Caressing all the others Beholding primal beauty |
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Originally Posted by RHPeat Originally Posted by devaamido Originally Posted by RHPeat Originally Posted by devaamido Originally Posted by RHPeat A Renga: Feel free to copy it and add to it: place your name above the 2 or 3 lines you add. The stanza form is like a Haiku called a hokku which is followed by two 7 syllable lines by another poet. Whatever you write, only relates to the the group of lines just above it, like a tree growing different leaves on the same branch. A renga continues to alternate 3-line/2-line stanzas throughout, never following a stanza with one of the same length. A syllable count like this: (5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7) and so on. Each (parenthesis can be a different poet). You can only repeat after someone else has written. The point being that you are forced to deal what the other poet has written. Traditionally it is like a game to make it hard for the person that follows. A Renga// On Wilted love Ginga Beaten by raindrops Lightning crushed my tainted love I sit in silence RH Peat The black iris is for death: A dry snow covers the ground Ginga Iced iris stiffens In the subzero wasteland All love becomes numb RH Peat the sigh is barren landscape: failure the sharpness of cold DevaAmido Bright pink then onyx Turned the hues of my heartstrings The day I lost you Ginga Lost, complacent fool, the sting Wilts beyond recognition Tenderpoison like a dead flower to long unwatered in the heat my love has wilted RHPeat The pulse hangs in summer’s heat In ticking time the sun burns hot Ginga warm embracing melt water flows as love takes hold no longer wilted alive Deaamido Exuberantly springing Twixt dead and fetid flowers RH Peat An eye slips open the leaves and stems uncurl roots unwind through earth Devaamido Caressing all the others Beholding primal beauty RH Peat The basics are here: Air, soft loam, sunlight, water Everything opens Devaamido Into mouths of every shape Pours Springtime’s feast of Bacchus |
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Originally Posted by devaamido Originally Posted by RHPeat Originally Posted by devaamido Originally Posted by RHPeat Originally Posted by devaamido Originally Posted by RHPeat A Renga: Feel free to copy it and add to it: place your name above the 2 or 3 lines you add. The stanza form is like a Haiku called a hokku which is followed by two 7 syllable lines by another poet. Whatever you write, only relates to the the group of lines just above it, like a tree growing different leaves on the same branch. A renga continues to alternate 3-line/2-line stanzas throughout, never following a stanza with one of the same length. A syllable count like this: (5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7) and so on. Each (parenthesis can be a different poet). You can only repeat after someone else has written. The point being that you are forced to deal what the other poet has written. Traditionally it is like a game to make it hard for the person that follows. A Renga// On Wilted love Ginga Beaten by raindrops Lightning crushed my tainted love I sit in silence RH Peat The black iris is for death: A dry snow covers the ground Ginga Iced iris stiffens In the subzero wasteland All love becomes numb RH Peat the sigh is barren landscape: failure the sharpness of cold DevaAmido Bright pink then onyx Turned the hues of my heartstrings The day I lost you Ginga Lost, complacent fool, the sting Wilts beyond recognition Tenderpoison like a dead flower to long unwatered in the heat my love has wilted RHPeat The pulse hangs in summer’s heat In ticking time the sun burns hot Ginga warm embracing melt water flows as love takes hold no longer wilted alive Deaamido Exuberantly springing Twixt dead and fetid flowers RH Peat An eye slips open the leaves and stems uncurl roots unwind through earth Devaamido Caressing all the others Beholding primal beauty RH Peat The basics are here: Air, soft loam, sunlight, water Everything opens Devaamido Into mouths of every shape Pours Springtime’s feast of Bacchus ginga Ooze of nectar Kissing bees sap the blossoms Harmonious fleur |
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Re: Wilted LoveI am still waiting for my flower to bloom. |
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Originally Posted by jbear84 I am still waiting for my flower to bloom. She had three seeds from her woum. I want her to flourish, And her mind I nourish.  |
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Originally Posted by ginga Originally Posted by devaamido Originally Posted by RHPeat Originally Posted by devaamido Originally Posted by RHPeat Originally Posted by devaamido Originally Posted by RHPeat A Renga: Feel free to copy it and add to it: place your name above the 2 or 3 lines you add. The stanza form is like a Haiku called a hokku which is followed by two 7 syllable lines by another poet. Whatever you write, only relates to the the group of lines just above it, like a tree growing different leaves on the same branch. A renga continues to alternate 3-line/2-line stanzas throughout, never following a stanza with one of the same length. A syllable count like this: (5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7)+(5-7-5)+(7-7) and so on. Each (parenthesis can be a different poet). You can only repeat after someone else has written. The point being that you are forced to deal what the other poet has written. Traditionally it is like a game to make it hard for the person that follows. A Renga// On Wilted love Ginga Beaten by raindrops Lightning crushed my tainted love I sit in silence RH Peat The black iris is for death: A dry snow covers the ground Ginga Iced iris stiffens In the subzero wasteland All love becomes numb RH Peat the sigh is barren landscape: failure the sharpness of cold DevaAmido Bright pink then onyx Turned the hues of my heartstrings The day I lost you Ginga Lost, complacent fool, the sting Wilts beyond recognition Tenderpoison like a dead flower to long unwatered in the heat my love has wilted RHPeat The pulse hangs in summer’s heat In ticking time the sun burns hot Ginga warm embracing melt water flows as love takes hold no longer wilted alive Deaamido Exuberantly springing Twixt dead and fetid flowers RH Peat An eye slips open the leaves and stems uncurl roots unwind through earth Devaamido Caressing all the others Beholding primal beauty RH Peat The basics are here: Air, soft loam, sunlight, water Everything opens Devaamido Into mouths of every shape Pours Springtime’s feast of Bacchus ginga Luscious nectar full Kissing bees sap the blossoms Harmonious fleur |
Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words.
Robert Frost (1875-1963) American Poet.